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Jolie wanted to say something profound to him. She wanted to tell
him how much she loved him. How important he was to her very being. But, when she
pressed her hand against his chest every single word left her brain. There was
not a single trace of his normal warmth. His chest, normally firm, because he
was a muscular man, now was hard to the touch and she could feel the coldness
radiating through the thick layers of his uniform. Jolie jerked her hand away and
stumbled back. She couldn’t catch her breath. Her heart beat so fast it was
painful. She needed air, so she rushed back through the mourning people and
crashed through the front doors of the funeral home. The fingers she’s pressed
to his chest still felt cold and the chill seemed to be spreading throughout
her entire body. Jolie wanted her love back. She wanted her life back. She
wanted Ethan.
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Wow - You got me. I thought she was reaching for the guy in the picture, then you pulled a switcheroo. Clever.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great way to describe her reaction, with the chill coursing through her. I already empathize with her.
Wow. That was some powerful, emotional piece.
ReplyDeleteI TOTALLY FROZE AT THE PICTURE ALONE!!!!!!!!!!!!! I dribbled a bit too... ;-) Then the excerpt was awesome! Kerrianne Coombes
ReplyDeleteOh how totally tragic and dramatic! My heart broke in that simple paragraph...very powerful.
ReplyDeleteA very chilling moment of realization! Well done! I'm hooked!
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