Wednesday, November 21, 2012

Hump Day Hook

Today you get a true WIP as I reveal a little of Jolie's story. Jolie is a character from my novel Courageous Dare. While Dare was about Nash and Baylee, this story will be all Jolie and her journey to find love after a devastating loss.

This will be the hero in the story.

Jolie wanted to say something profound to him. She wanted to tell him how much she loved him. How important he was to her very being. But, when she pressed her hand against his chest every single word left her brain. There was not a single trace of his normal warmth. His chest, normally firm, because he was a muscular man, now was hard to the touch and she could feel the coldness radiating through the thick layers of his uniform. Jolie jerked her hand away and stumbled back. She couldn’t catch her breath. Her heart beat so fast it was painful. She needed air, so she rushed back through the mourning people and crashed through the front doors of the funeral home. The fingers she’s pressed to his chest still felt cold and the chill seemed to be spreading throughout her entire body. Jolie wanted her love back. She wanted her life back. She wanted Ethan. 


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5 comments:

  1. Wow - You got me. I thought she was reaching for the guy in the picture, then you pulled a switcheroo. Clever.
    What a great way to describe her reaction, with the chill coursing through her. I already empathize with her.

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  2. Wow. That was some powerful, emotional piece.

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  3. I TOTALLY FROZE AT THE PICTURE ALONE!!!!!!!!!!!!! I dribbled a bit too... ;-) Then the excerpt was awesome! Kerrianne Coombes

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  4. Oh how totally tragic and dramatic! My heart broke in that simple paragraph...very powerful.

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  5. A very chilling moment of realization! Well done! I'm hooked!

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