Wednesday, May 8, 2013

Hump Day Hook

Hello, I'm sick this week so Ima keep it short and sweet.

Excerpt:


Jolie sat down after her long day of organizing. She tugged one of the last boxes onto her lap and ran her thumb over the lid. Jolie swallowed past the bitter grip of grief. She flipped the lid back and stared brokenly at the contents. Baseball caps, old, faded t-shirts, photo’s that held perfect moments that Jolie would never need a picture to remember. The box was full-to-the-brim with Ethan, even his smell filtered from within. Great gasping sobs left her as she slammed the box closed and shoved it under her bed. Her heart pounded in her chest, and panic bubbled its way up until she cried out in agony.

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8 comments:

  1. Everything will be stuck in her memory to haunt her. Great hook

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  2. Hope you feel better soon!

    Very good hook:) Waaaant moooooore, lol:)

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  3. You could feel her sadness in the hook-very nice!

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  4. Her heartbreak feels so real, just as when we lose a loved one. Get better soon!

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  5. Poor lady. Her grief is deep but I'm intrigued by her panc. What's the threat? Nice hook.

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  6. So very sad. Makes me want to make sure she finds a happy ending.

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  7. How utterly gut-wrenchingly painful. Wonderful hook. Feel better, lady.

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