Excerpt:
Jolie sat down after her long day of organizing her new home. She
tugged one of the last boxes onto her lap and ran her thumb over the lid. Her
heart began an insistent pace and Jolie swallowed past the bitter grip of
grief. She flipped the lid back and stared brokenly at the contents. Baseball
caps, old, faded t-shirts, photo’s that held perfect still moments that Jolie
would never need a picture to remember. The box was full-to-the-brim with
Ethan, even his smell filtered from within. Great gasping sobs left her as she
slammed the box closed and shoved it under her bed. Her heart pounded in her
chest, and panic bubbled its way up until she cried out in agony.
I know, I know, I like the dramatic stuff! It's how I roll.
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Oh my goodness, so sad :( It's like she's torturing herself just by opening the box. Nice hook! I want to read on in the hopes that she'll find happiness.
ReplyDeleteOh, the heart wrenching pain. Very raw moment...wonderfully captured. Great hook!
ReplyDeleteOh, how sad. I can feel the pain.
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ReplyDeleteVery heartfelt! Good piece. Thanks for sharing. :)
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:-) Dramatic works. Very vivid scene.
ReplyDeleteThe emotion is raw and heartfelt. Good selection!
ReplyDeleteAww. Im heartbroken with her. Well done!
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