Excerpt:
“Dad,” Brax said his voice shaking as he kneeled
beside his father. “Hang in there, dad.” He held Roman’s hand close to his
heart as he leaned over him.
“Make their blood flow, Braxton.” Roman coughed and
winced in pain.
The car swerved and skidded around corners as the
driver tore down the winding roads. Cam couldn’t stop the tears from flowing.
“Camellia, take care of my son,” Roman whispered as
he gripped her hand.
“You’re going to help me take care of him, Roman.”
He shook his head slightly, coughed again, and then
spoke to Brax. “It’s in your hands now, son. I love you.”
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This is so dramatic, and quite a departure from last week! Captured the intensity so well it so few lines.
ReplyDeleteACK!! What a hook! Totally caught me emotionally and I'm dying to know what happens!
ReplyDeleteAn intense moment for sure. I'd like to know what got them to this scene and what comes next. Great hook.
ReplyDeleteWhoa, that was dramatic! I'm hooked!
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh! That is so sad, and an excellent hook!
ReplyDeleteOh how emotional! You really feel for them. Nice hook.
ReplyDeleteYou always write with such emotion. This is lovely writing...but so, so sad.
ReplyDeleteWow... not sure I was ready for such powerful emotions so early in the morning.
ReplyDeleteYou should put a warning sign: Danger, strong emotions ahead!
Aww, poor them. But nice hook!
ReplyDeleteVery powerful scene and a tantalising end
ReplyDeleteWhoa, I felt the tug of fear and sorrow as I read. Nice hook!
ReplyDeleteLacie Nation at her best!
ReplyDeleteWow-what an intense hook!
ReplyDeleteGreat job of showing these people's deep emotions at this heartbreaking time. Well done!
ReplyDeleteWow....the emotion in this! Great job! I'm ready to cry....
ReplyDeleteSo heartbreaking! I was completely drawn in.
ReplyDeleteI'm with L VanHorn...my first thoughts were "how heartbreaking" too!! **sob**
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